Apr

30

Flaming Snot Rockets! By day Jim Hill is a graphic designer working with businesses to improve their branding, online presence and social media profile. By night he’s a children’s writer/illustrator out to make kids laugh until milk shoots out of their little noses.
He is a member of the Society of Children’s Book Writers & Illustrators, and serves on the boards of both the Cape Cod Technology Council and the Cape Cod Writers Center. You can find him online at heyjimhill.com

Spring is here, and that means it’s time for another #NaPiBoWriWee! What? You don’t know about this awesome, exciting, Twitter-based writing challenge for picture book writers like you? Read on, MacDuff.

#NaPiBoWriWee is the brain-child of Paula Yoo. It’s a response to NaNoWriMo (National Novel Writing Month) for children’s book writers and takes place May 1 – 7. The Twitter hashtag stands for “National Picture Book Writing Week” and the challenge thrown is to write a complete picture book manuscript for seven days in a row. Sounds simple? Ha! Give it a shot, tough guy.

Keep in mind that these are intended to be first drafts, and that means it’s OK to be messy, shitty even, to borrow the parlance of Anne Lamont. I know my stories this week will be brain-dumps of the first degree. Too wordy, shifting tense, changes in voice, etc. I may even change the characters names half-way through. And that’s OK. Viva la First Draft!

I do have a leg up on anyone starting fresh due to my other favorite Twitter-based writing challenge for picture book writers, #NaPiBoIdMo. That lovely hashtag was brought to life by Tara Lazar’s own response to NaNoWriMo and it stands for “National Picture Book Idea Month”. It takes place in November and is the perfect fraternal twin to #NaPiBoWriWee. Here’s why.

Every day during #NaPiBoIdMo the goal is to come up with a fresh picture book idea. No writing beyond the barebones idea is required, although you may end writing a bit (you can’t stop the brainstorms sometimes, just let’em roll).

The daily practice during these challenges can be tough, but it can also get you in a good working habit. I know I have to fight to carve out daily writing time. Accepting the challenge and following friends online helps me stay on target.

I can’t wait to open up my Google doc from November’s #NaPiBoIdMo and troll through for the ideas that have been waiting patiently for life. I’ve already written up a couple, but I have over two dozen other ideas to pick from, and reviewing those old ideas is very likely to spark something new. I am a writer, after all. *ahem*

I hope you’ll join me in #NaPiBoWriWee. Make sure to check out Paula’s site as well. She’ll be hosting famous guest bloggers and holding contests all week. I may even blog about it myself at heyjimhill.com. See you in the hashtags!

Apr

28

 

I’m studying how to work with dialogue that flows and dialogue that shows the unique voice of each person participating in the dialogue. Mastering this technique will keep your novel REAL and INTERESTING to readers. Dialogue should move the story forward, so eliminate unnecessary dialogue.

Try this exercise from scene to scene for your first three chapters before sending them to an agent or an editor:

1.  Highlight the dialogue, minus any tags or action, in one color for the first person speaking. Then do the same, in a different color, for the other person involved in the dialogue. 

2.  Read the dialogue aloud. Does it make sense and flow? Does the dialogue move the story forward? Do you know who is speaking at all times? Does each character speak in a unique voice?

3.  If you answer NO to these questions, then you need to revise and or expand your dialogue.

4.   Working with your dialogue without the distraction of other words in a scene, help you develop the skill.

Joan

Apr

27

Greetings;
When I was young, I dreamed of becoming a respected writer. As with many people’s dreams, mine settled on the back burner while I pursued a profession, which would regularly pay the bills. Nursing was a good choice for job satisfaction and respect, but there was still that longing to write. Over the years, poems and short stories did trickle from brain to paper, but it was more a hobby, a respite from everyday living.
Then one day I decided it was time to professionally write. What had been written before wasn’t great, but I did believe there was some element of creativity and voice within my words so I set a daily schedule and began to write something every day. I enrolled in writing classes and joined a writing group. Eventually those practice lessons in writing (one can’t become successful at anything without lots of practice) began to take on a life of their own. Characters, who hadn’t been previously planned for, began appearing in stories and sometimes even took over the main character’s role. I didn’t always understand where they’d come from, but it was exciting to meet them. Even after a story had ended, a few characters had become so real I couldn’t bear to leave them behind, and they remain as friends in my memory.
As the writing increased in volume, story beginnings began to show up on the third or fifth page with everything previously written acting like a stoker for a real beginning. In the beginning, I didn’t want to lose those first words because it had taken time and thought to write them, but once I understood their importance as a starter engine it was easier to let them go. Sometimes, I was able to use some of those paragraphs later in the story—a good reason for not cutting words until the story is completed. Then “cut” and “paste” became essential tools for moving the creative thoughts to a better place in the plot.
For a time, I considered writing as a trade, and began to take stock of everything written, like greeting card sayings, cereal box notations, newspaper articles, and such. There are many industries where clear, concise copywriting–just the facts–is needed and doesn’t have to be a work of art. In Peter Bowerman’s book, The Well-Fed Writer, he notes, “…What would you say if I told you that there’s an arena of writing that if pursued with reasonable diligence by an even modestly talented and minimally creative individual, could generate self-sufficiency inside of six months…” He gave me hope, not so much for trading in my creativity for financial gain, but more that in our lifetimes today, there is time for two or more careers. If you have ever considered writing strictly to pay the bills, I think his book is a valuable tool in how to get moving in that direction. Even working part time, he was able to make $2000 a month with zero experience, and he explains in clear language how you can too.
As for me, I didn’t have a choice; the creativity bug won out. It was more than wanting to create; I needed to create and so I did—a decision I have never regretted.
Until next Wednesday, consider what your second career could be and do keep your dream alive.
Be well. Linda

Apr

25

April 22, 2011

Reading our own writing out loud tells us a lot about what we’ve put to paper. Hearing our voice, for some reason, causes us to HEAR our words differently than when we read them silently or on the screen.

Wednesday night I attended the monthly Writers Night Out evening sponsored by the Cape Cod Writers Center. It was “Poetry Night” and I was privileged to read three minutes of my poetry. I began with haiku from my book Seasons Rising, and then read three other poems: “Divorce”, “David’s Going Away Present” and my national prize winning poem “Winter Night”.

In reading out loud, I heard places where I wanted to change a word or phrase. Amazing! Even in Seasons Rising I found a line to switch, words to drop, a synonym to change.

We can never read out loud too much. Even when I read children’s’ books to my grandchildren, I hear places I might add or change the text. And sometimes I do just that to the comment from them: “Nana, that’s not in the book.” But I think it’s fun and almost wait for them to notice.

Here are several suggestions for reading your own work for criticism.

1. Put away your writing for a period of time. This gives you a fresh look at your work.
2. Give up any pretenses of plot, rhyme, words, character. See the work with a fresh mind.
3. Read slowly and out loud.
4. Tape your reading and play it back. It’s amazing what you hear when you listen to your own voice.
5. Print it out and read it. I find seeing the words on paper help me to be more critical and to notice more. I also can edit, shift paragraphs, correct spelling and punctuation as I hear where my voice halts, pauses and stops.

Have fun reading. It’s a part of you on paper!
Creatively,
Christina

Apr

24

TOP 10 BLOGS FOR WRITERS:

1.      Story Fix
2.      Men with Pens
3.      Make a Living Writing
4.      Cats Eye Writer
5.      The Renegade Writer
6.      Writer Unboxed
7.      Word Play
8.      The Creative Penn
9.      Victoria Mixon
10.  Courage to Create

JOAN

Apr

23

If you receive an offer for a picture book, (or any book for that matter) and you want to find an agent after the fact, tell the editor “Thank you so much for your offer. Before I get back to you on the final terms of the offer, I’m going to try and partner with a literary agent.” They’ll be fine with this, it happens all the time. When you query an agent, put “Picture book Query — OFFER RECEIVED” on the subject line of your email. You’ll catch agent’s eyes because it’s good news for both you and the prospective agent.

Since you have an offer on the table, the agent search won’t take too long. Agents tend to read manuscripts that have offers quickly, and picture books are easy to evaluate. If getting an agent is your eventual goal and you’re sure you’ll have one sooner or later, from the first contract.

It’s tougher to attract an agent with a picture book, because MG or YA fiction manuscripts usually pay agents more profit, so be sure to only query agents who specifically mention an interest in picture books. Most agents want to work with clients who have many book ideas in the making, and or completed. Be prepared to show agents you long range career potential.

Agents take 15% of the money you earn They may not be able to get you a better advance, but they probably will be able to negotiate better terms for you, like rights, options, and royalties. You will lose some money in the short term, but you may fare better in the long run.

If you have an offer, the agent will still need to evaluate his or her personal connection to you and your work before committing to representation. Having an offer is no guarantee, but it can’t hurt.

JOAN

Apr

22

Agent Mary Kole is willing to  suggest some maximum word counts for different types of projects.

  • Board Book — 50 words max
  • Early Picturebook — 300 words max
  • Picturebook — 700 words max (Seriously. Max.)
  • Nonfiction Picturebook — 2,000 words max
  • Early Reader — I’d say 1,500 words is the max.
  • Chapterbook — This varies widely, depending on grade and reader level. 15,000 words max.
  • Middle Grade — 35,000 words max for contemporary, mystery, humor, 45,000 max for fantasy/sci-fi, adventure and historical
  • YA — 70,000 words max for contemporary, humor, mystery, historical, romance, etc. 90,000 words max for fantasy, sci-fi, paranormal, etc.
  • These are just estimates from Mary’s experience. If a manuscript goes over the maximum that editors usually deal with, there has to be a  good reason.

Early Middle Grade” in the 7,000 word range are a No. That’s too tiny. Early Middle Grade, beings at around 15,000 words minimum

 There are all sorts of gray areas, and word count is tricky.

Some agents do automatically reject manuscripts because of their length.

A manuscript over 80k, has to work hard to convince Mary that all those words are necessary.

JOAN

Apr

20

Every creative writer has experienced the excitement of getting lost in the story being written. The everyday, real world disappears from view and thought as one’s words weave together to form plot, character, and theme. We writers are, within that time span, transported into another dimension of ourselves.
However, getting lost in the story isn’t enough to create a blended beginning, middle, and end. That takes discipline and hard work. A writer’s working pattern includes a specified time set aside to write every day and a work place apart from house noises–a private space where computer, printer, and working supplies can be left out, ready for the new day.
Discipline plays a major role because it’s difficult to leave or refrain from attending fun happenings. How often, when you are writing, does a family member or friend try to convince you to write some other time, as if what you are doing isn’t important?  Consider, if you are interrupted just as relevant thoughts and creative ideas are beginning to blend, what might have become a spectacular moment in your plot will be lost. If it’s happening a lot, friends and family must be enlightened as to your goals. If it is important enough that you become a published writer, difficult decisions will have to be made. It can be done with kind words for after all, you are creative with words by nature. Give it some thought and plan ahead as to how to let your loved ones know good writing takes full concentration, and you want to become a good writer.
When our children were young, I sat them down and asked for their help. I began with, “Every afternoon for thirty minutes, I need a quiet spot (my bedroom with the door closed) where I can be left alone to write. We’ll set the stove clock for thirty minutes, and when it rings, you come and open my door.” They asked what I’d be doing without them and why they couldn’t open the door. I explained I wanted to write a story for them. We did a few trial runs with the time clock and planned what they could do for their thirty minutes. Designing and coloring a picture on plain paper to show me was a favorite. It became a quiet time after lunch each day for them to settle from a busy morning of play. After the first trial, it was decided each child would have a turn coming to get me to keep the noise down. The plan worked well because the children had a part in it and felt important. Of course, the door opened a few times to test the rule, but once they felt secure, I was still close by, that stopped. I did tell them if anyone was bleeding, it was okay to open the door before the bell rang. That was the nurse part of me.
Now for the hard work part. Many would-be writers write for the wrong reasons—to see their name in print or on a book cover–but aren’t interested in the hard work part. In writing the first draft of a manuscript, words often flow as if on angels’ wings, transporting the writer into joyful creativity, while leaving physical and/or emotional pain behind. The hard work begins with the second draft and onward. Perseverance becomes the key. My dad’s favorite expression, “If you can’t learn the easy way, learn the hard way,” sustained me on myriad occasions. I don’t mean a story or novel must be perfect, but it does need to be the very best we can accomplish. I joined (and still do) writing workshops to improve my writing tools. From May 13-15, six members of our Cape Cod Children’s Writers group will attend the spring conference of SCBWI in Fitchburg. MA. Over five-hundred children’s writers are expected to attend. More than three dozen workshops will feature dozens of authors, who will detail necessary writing tools from finding your own voice to finding your marketing voice. Those conferences are gold mines of information. The five-day Cape Cod Writers’ Conference is held annually during the third week of August in the Craigville area, and features author-instructors from all over America. It’s an amazing week of living among writers of all ages. There are rooms available within the writing community and in homes around Craigville Beach. There is also a young people’s group with scholarships available. If interested contact them for information on the August session.
Finally, I’ve lived long enough to know writing rules change. In the eighties, there was a change in punctuation rules with the use of many commas being deleted—another good reason for keeping updated with workshops. There is a new rule concerning spaces after the period at the end of a sentence. It used to call for two spaces, but has been reduced to one space. I’ve heard magazine editors don’t want to have to reformat the files they receive. They want it ready to flow into the design program with as few strokes as possible, but I’m not too sure I get it. Okay, time for another workshop.
Until next Wednesday, be well and have a fun weekend. Linda

Apr

18

Do you love to write? Does writing trigger sparkles in your heart? Why do you want to be a writer, a published author even? What is the most important thing about your writing? Is it fun? Does it matter if you “get published”? If you knew you’d never get published, would you still write?

These are some questions I ask myself from time to time. The answers differ depending upon my mood and the amount of life-stress I am experiencing. What I do know for sure is, I really, really, REALLY love creating stuff. What about you?

Angel Blessings, Susan Lee

Apr

15

April 14, 2011

Last week I wrote a silly story about a warrior who messed up his good deeds till he rescued a beautiful maiden from a giant-squirrel-guarded tower. Today I’d like to write a bit about creating with children and encouraging their creative mind to bloom.
My grandson and I composed the story together. He was in bed; I sat on the edge of the bed as we developed the story line. When working on a story, it’s good to ask questions, especially if there’s a silence. It helps the child to think outside the box, to create from his/her own mind. And it gives them an ownership of the story. He named the hero, he invented two incidents and a character, and I added the villain, which he thought was hilarious.
Secondly, it’s fun to act out some parts. When we arrived at the monster spot, I jumped up and threw my arms in the air and enacted a zombie walk. I made the monster voice low and gruff. Again peals of laughter.
When the fight between the hero and villain came, I stood up and acted out the sword fight. All this time, he’s sitting in bed watching, laughing but preparing for sleep.
This action is good in two ways. It engages the child in SEEING as well as hearing. Children are so visual today – TV, video games, WEE. It also gave him permission to let loose and be silly once in a while. Seeing the action adds to the entertainment of creation.
Thirdly, I subtly instructed him in the act of writing. By telling him we needed three scenes for Jordan to work through his mistaken deeds, I also am teaching him how to write a story with three incidents and an arc. The arc is the hero’s solving a problem. Jordan messed up with the beggar. He frightened the monster away which gave him courage to fight the giant squirrel.
Creating stories with children encourages them to let their minds open up to possibilities. The story doesn’t have to be publishable – surely mine wasn’t. The point is to help the child tot think, to invent, to make believe, to create outside the box. If you can act out a part of the story and not feel foolish, all the better. Kids love to play act. Think of Barbie and Ken, the farm toys, matchbox cars. In my youth it was paper dolls.
Creating with children means capturing a bit of the child in us we left behind. It’s fun. And – who knows – you may come up with a publishable book!!!
Try it – you may love it and it will certainly charm your prodigy!

Happy writing,
Christina

Apr

13

Greetings;
Consider for a moment the aggravation of waiting in a long line at the grocery or clothing store, at a bank, or in a doctor’s office, and wanting to storm up to the manager declaring the people in charge must be half-wits. I think every person has experienced such a negative feeling, but also consider as a writer some positive ways to spend your waiting time. Choose another person, also in line, and observe his or her reaction to the delay. Then imagine actually being that person. Note facial expressions, body movements, and conversations held with the people waiting with them. Register the language used during their conversations: “…this waiting is a bunch of crap. Why don’t they get more help?” or the up-beat, “Your little boy is being so good,” and “Thank goodness I’m healthy enough to stand in line at all.” Those words and actions can be used later to breathe life into a story you’re writing.
Hopefully, your pad and pen are handy to note what you are seeing and hearing because you can’t rely on memory alone. In nursing school, our psychologist mentioned that approximately 23% of what the average person learns today will be forgotten by tomorrow if not written down–smart professor, insinuating we should take notes without actually telling us to do so.
Another alternative to wasting time while sitting in a waiting room: Choose a magazine and imagine a different theme for one of the pictures. Place a new person or persons into the scene and imagine what they might be saying or planning to do and why. A new story can originate while you wait if you write it down.
If in a grocery store line, and a mother is standing behind you with a tired and therefore cranky child, what might happen if you let her go in front of you? Her look of surprise and thankfulness will make your day brighter. But, what if it’s a harried young businesswoman, who keeps glancing at her watch, and finally loudly complains, “I’m going to be late for an appointment if this line doesn’t move!” How would you react if you were she, or, if you were in front of her in that scenario? Is there a story line there? Even angry people have a story to tell if we listen.
When waiting in a physician’s or dentist’s office, I search for children’s magazines like Highlights or Cricket to see what kind of stories and poetry is currently being accepted by the editors. When I’m finally ushered into the examining room, I bring the children’s magazine with me, because there is always more waiting in those rooms. One practitioner’s eyebrows rose when she noticed what I was reading, but she said nothing. As we talked, she asked what I’ve been doing since retiring from nursing. When I said, “I write for children,” she grinned and replied, “Oh. I was a bit concerned when I saw you reading a young child’s magazine. Now I understand.” Outward actions and appearances can be deceiving, and writers should take note of interesting assumptions when creating a character.
Finally, consider creating some extra waiting time in your day’s schedule, perhaps, when lunching alone in a restaurant booth. Stay a bit longer and order another coffee, tea, or dessert, but do please tip your waitress a little more for monopolizing her station. Then listen and write down other customers’ comments about their lives in your notebook. One day I asked my harried waitress, after a trying party had finally left, “Want to sit a minute and take a breath?” She did. I must tell you, her story was amazing. Both talker and listener felt good after our quick conversation. Never miss an opportunity to make someone feel better.
On another afternoon, while in a restaurant eating lunch, I realized I was sitting behind two young teenaged girls, who were talking about having babies. One noted, “I’d like to have kids, but I’ve heard how painful it is. Who wants to go through that!” and the second replied, “I ain’t. I’m adopting my kids.” Could you write a story about their concerns and reactions to fear of pain? If you’re a creative YA writer, your imagination is already taking off. Where’s your notebook?
Until next Wednesday, while waiting somewhere, watch and listen for a new story this week. It may prove to be your best work.
Be well. Linda

Apr

10

Marge McAlister shares some hints for writing a character’s thoughts.

One can use a tag like “he thought” as close to the beginning of the thought as possible. This tips the readers off that someone was thinking.

One can also use italics to show thoughts. A good rule of thumb is this: Use italics for thoughts that are especially significant in some way – or such strong thoughts that you want to see them emphasized in the mind of the reader. This might happen at times of great stress or fear for your character. Many writers over use italics.

Neither of these two methods is the best way to show thoughts.

The single most effective way is to show what your characters are thinking is to blend their thoughts into the narrative flow. Instead of moving into the present tense, stay in the past tense. (Unless your entire story is in the present tense.)

Let’s use a few examples to show the difference.

Using The Present Tense To Indicate Thoughts

Chris slowly descended the stairs, all senses alert. What if someone attacks me? I won’t be much use to Laura if I’m dead.

He stopped on the bottom tread, holding his breath and peering into the gloom. Over in the far corner, something moved… or was he imagining things? No, something did move. Chris was sure of it. He swallowed. I wish I had stayed at home.

The constant switching from past to present tense and from third person to first person is annoying to the reader. The “flow” is much smoother if the tense and person remain the same.

2. Using The Tag “He Thought

Chris slowly descended the stairs, all senses alert. What if someone attacks me? he thought. I won’t be much use to Laura if I’m dead.

He stopped on the bottom tread, holding his breath and peering into the gloom. Over in the far corner, something moved… or was he imagining things? No, he thought, something did move. Chris was sure of it. He swallowed. I wish I had stayed at home.

This is an improvement. Now that we’ve inserted “he thought”, the reader has clear signals. They’re prepared for the change in tense – they know that most thoughts are in the present tense.

3. Using Italics

Chris slowly descended the stairs, all senses alert. What if someone attacks me? I won’t be much use to Laura if I’m dead.

He stopped on the bottom tread, holding his breath and peering into the gloom. Over in the far corner, something moved… or was he imagining things? No, something did move. Chris was sure of it. He swallowed. I wish I had stayed at home.

The use of italics is another clear signal that we are reading someone’s thoughts. They are a valuable tool - but over-used. Most of us are thinking all the time as we go about our daily business.) In every second paragraph there would be another sentence in italics.

Italics are used for other purposes. Some authors write page after page of italics to show a dream, or put the whole prologue in italics. Italics are often used for emphasis. If your readers see too many italics, they may subconsciously give more emphasis to those thoughts than you’d intended.

The best, least intrusive way to show a character’s thoughts… blended into the natural flow of the text.

4. Blending Thoughts Into the Narrative

Chris slowly descended the stairs, all senses alert. What if someone attacked him? He wouldn’t be much use to Laura if he were dead.

He stopped on the bottom tread, holding his breath and peering into the gloom. Over in the far corner, something moved… or was he imagining things? No, something had moved. Chris was sure of it. He swallowed. He wished he had stayed at home.

As you can see, in the final example, the flow of the narrative is not interrupted by changes to tense or person, tags like ‘he thought’ or use of italics. The reader is not disturbed in any way… but we are well aware that we are deep in Chris’s viewpoint, and we ‘know’ what he is thinking.

If you wanted to emphasise the fact that there was indeed something moving, and that Chris was scared, you could include italics for one sentence: No, something did move. You would keep it in the present tense, because it’s almost like Chris vocalizing a thought… as though he were talking to someone else. In this case, your final version would read:

Chris slowly descended the stairs, all senses alert. What if someone attacked him? He wouldn’t be much use to Laura if he were dead.

He stopped on the bottom tread, holding his breath and peering into the gloom. Over in the far corner, something moved… or was he imagining things? No, something did move. Chris was sure of it. He swallowed. He wished he had stayed at home.

In the end, it’s up to you. You’re the author. You know how you want the reader to interpret your words. Just keep telling yourself: “Make it smooth!”

Joan

Apr

9

April 8, 2011

“Tell me a story, Nana,” my grandson said as I put him to bed. I mentally scrambled.
“About what, Sweetie?” I asked.
“Tell me about a warrior.”

“Once upon a time long ago, a young warrior …

What shall we call him?” I asked.
“Jordan.”

a warrior name Jordan, wanted to do good deeds for people, but he always seemed to mess them up. When he helped his mother with the garden, he planted the bulbs upside down. When he hitched the oxen to the plow for his father, he put them on the opposite sides and they refused to move.

One day Jordan decided to leave home and try his good deeds elsewhere. He kissed his mother good bye as she handed him a pack for lunch. He shook his father’s hand, patted his younger brother and sister on the head and prepared to leave.

Mounting his horse, he donned his armor and rode off toward a small town by the mountains in the distance. The sun rose behind him warming his back and the horses flanks.

So what happens to him?” I asked. “He needs to meet someone on the road and try to do a good deed.”
“How about a beggar?”
“And what happens? Remember Jordan tries to do a good deed and it fails.”
“ He gives him a ride and he falls off.”

On his way, he saw a poor beggar sitting at the crossroads. His clothes were torn and dirty and his matted hair stuck up like the pointed mountains in the distance. Jordan dismounted and walked over to the man. I will do him a good deed, he thought. “I don’t have any money,” he said, “but I can give you a ride to that city by the mountains.”

The beggar agreed as he hopped up behind Jordan. Off they rode toward the western mountains. Soon, however, the beggar began to complain that the horse’s rump was too hard. “And besides,” he whined, “it hurts to bounce up and down like this.” “Sorry about that,” said Jordan. “Perhaps if I go faster it will be better.” He spurred the horse to gallop and was riding so hard he never noticed that the beggar fell off in the dirt and rolled to the side of the road.

Now we need another problem that Jordan runs into.”                                                                                                                                                My grandson thought a while. “I don’t know,” he said. “How about this?” I asked.

Jordan rode on till he came to a well on the side of the road. Again he dismounted to drink and water his horse. As he approached the well, he found a dog panting and lying on its side beside the well. Another means to do a good deed, thought Jordan. “Poor dog,” he said. “You must be thirsty.” He took off his helmet, scooped up water and let the dog drink. Suddenly the dog fell over dead. The water had been poisoned! “The dog saved us from dying,” he said to his horse, who dropped his head and sadly nudged the dog with his muzzle.

“Oh, that’s sad.”                                                                                                                                                                                                                               “Yes, it is,” I said. “Shall we change it?”
He thought. “No, sometimes things are sad – like the time your cat ran away.”                                                                                                   “Okay, we’ll keep it. Now in every story we have three problems. What will the third one be?”
“A monster.”

Jordan continued on but he was hungry. By and by, he saw a wooded area. He dismounted there and led his horse to a grassy spot where he grazed. Jordan sat under a tree, opened his lunch pack and began to eat. WHOOSH! An ugly monster jumped out of the tree right in front of Jordan.

Now what does that monster look like?” I asked. “We need to describe him.”                                                                                                       “He’s ugly and has a big head and is furry all over, and his ears stick up and are round and he growls like this: Arr-rrr-ah.”   “Good,” I praise his description.

“Give me your food,” the monster growled in a big, angry voice. His big head wagged back and forth.                                                      “Not on your life,” replied Jordan, pulling his sword out of its scabbard.
“Then I’m going to take it,” cried the monster. And he jumped at Jordan. Jordan leaped aside and spanked the monster with the side of his sword right on his bum. The monster jumped in the air and ran off. (Peals of grandchild laughter.) Finally Jordan reached the plain that led to the mountain. There he saw a tower in the distance rising high into the sky. In front of it stood a seven-foot squirrel holding a small sword and wearing a helmet that slid over his left eye.

“A squirrel?” my grandson asked.                                                                                                                                                                                          “Okay,” I replied, “I know it sounds stupid, but it’s the first thing that came to my mind. I’ve been battling squirrels all morning off my bird feeder.”
My grandson shrugged. “Okay.”

The squirrel rose to his full height as he watched Jordan approach. He lifted his saber as the helmet started to slip over his left eye. Jordan drew his sword and jumped off his steed. He raced toward the squirrel and a vicious battle ensued. They slashed and swiped their swords. Jordan cut the squirrel’s leg and the squirrel cut Jordan’s arm.

Suddenly the squirrel’s helmet fell over his left eye. He reached up to push it back. Before the squirrel could swing his saber, Jordan struck him with a deathly blow, and the bushy tailed giant fell to the ground at the base of the tower.

“My hero,” Jordan heard from the top of the tower. Looking up he saw a beautiful maiden imprisoned in the top of the tower. He slashed the lock on the door with his sword, ran up the circular staircase to rescued the beautiful maiden.

I really wanted to end it with the girl riding back to his home and falling in love with his brother. But I left him in the tower to find a good deed of rescue to perform there.

Some things are better left unsaid.

Happy creating!

 (Tune in next week for a comment and critique on this!!!)

 

Apr

8

March 18, 2011

I’ve been silent. I’ve been on vacation, skiing with the Cape Cod Ski Club. We flew to Minneapolis – 28 of us – and then on to Anchorage. After a 40 minute bus ride southeast along the Turnagain Arm of Cook Inlet, we were deposited at Alyeska where the tram rose from the hotel to the 2800 foot top of the mountain.
The Turnagain Arm is a long body of rather shallow water at low tide which runs between the great Alaska Range two mountain ranges. In the mid 1780’s Capt. James Cook, while looking for a passage to the northwest, sailed up the bay but had to turn around because he ran into shallow water and mountains that blocked his path. That’s where the name Turnagain Arm came from. It looks like an arm from the top of Alyeska, in the Chugach Mountains where we skied.
For a week we skied in foggy weather for three days and the glorious sunshine for the last two.
Although it was a little early for brown bears to leave their dens, we visited the Wildlife Sanctuary where we saw three adults and a couple of cubs. Muskoxen, antelopes, wood bison, coyotes, moose, deer, a bald eagle and elk also lived there in a protective environment.
It was a glorious week of exercise, good food, nice people, and comfortable accommodations. But it also means the end of skiing for the year for me. (Read frown) After accumulating 25 days of skiing, the most I’ve ever done in a season, I am wishing I could continue on the slopes of New England. Unfortunately the skis are sharpened, the boots shined, the parka and clothes washed and put away.
Now the garden and lawn await spring attention!

Apr

8

Author Janet Fox will be presenting her workshop, “Plot, Don’t Plod, and Pace, Don’t Race: Crafting a Well-Paced Plot in Novels for Children and Young Adults.” at the Society of Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators- New England conference in May. When I first read the description of this workshop, I put three checkmarks and a star next to it.

Janet will refer to Because of Winn-Dixie, by Kate DiCamillo, and Hunger Games, by Suzanne Collins, as examples of contemporary novels with successful plotting. I’ve read both of these excellent books. I highly recommend you put them on your “Must Read” list.

Janet has written a non-fiction book called Get Organized Without Losing It, a helpful book for middle schoolers written with great humor and fun illustrations.

Janet’s second book couldn’t be more different. Faithful is an historical novel that takes place between May 31 and August 10, 1904. It starts out in Newport, Rhode Island where Maggie Bennett is trying to prepare for her debut—when 16-year-old girls are presented to society as available for courtship. Maggie’s mother disappeared the year before, so only Maggie’s best friend, Kitty, can help her plan for this highly anticipated season of her life.

On May 31, Maggie’s father informs her they are going out west to Yellowstone, letting Maggie believe that her mother may be there. He promises Maggie they’ll return by the end of July, in time for her debut at the end of August.

Slowly, Maggie learns the truth that her father is broke and had to sell their mansion, her beloved horse, and let all their servants go. Maggie writes to her grandparents in Newport in an attempt to return. In the meantime, she looks for her mother.

Maggie meets and falls for a young man named Tom, and finds she is also falling in love with the beauty and wildness of Yellowstone. She changes her mind about returning to Newport and her old way of life, realizing that women had more opportunities out west, away from the pressure of high society. Maggie discovers what matters most to her, and has to stand against her father’s wishes to marry an older wealthy man who can provide for her and forge opportunities for her father.

Teenage girls may be surprised to read about how few rights girls had in 1904. They had to be obedient to their fathers, couldn’t speak their minds, often had arranged marriages and then had to obey their husbands. Young women were often married before they were twenty years old.

Janet Fox’s descriptions of the natural wonders of Yellowstone made me put it on my “bucket list” of places I want to see. You’ll feel the same way if you read Faithful.

Believe!

Karen Centofanti

Apr

6

Greetings;
My dear friend and poet, Lorna Starbird, has always insisted the term “fiction story” is redundant because the word “story” automatically sets the piece into the fiction category. In today’s language, the two are interchangeable with “story” being used when referring to fiction, as in the term “short story”. It generally means 500 to 3,000 words in length, although a few contests have allowed up to 5,000. Each short story contest provides its own word limit and if you go over, your story WILL be disqualified.
So what is today’s definition of fiction? Author, Gary Provost, defines it as, “…an event, statement, or occurrence that has been invented or feigned rather than having actually taken place…a literary work whose content is produced by the imagination and is not necessarily based on fact.” The next time you are speaking or writing about something that actually happened, consider it a “non-fiction piece” rather than a “non-fiction story”, and when you do, imagine a small, well-dressed lady named Lorna smiling at you.
To make matters more complicated (or lenient, depending on your personal view), some industrious person decided to coin the term “creative non-fiction”. Thanks. If writing in that specific category, it’s acceptable to write a non-fiction piece with fiction happenings in it. The National Inquirer does it all the time.
When I was asked, “Where do you find your ideas?” I smiled imagining me hunting under a couch or searching closets for those hidden, illusive little buggers. I didn’t say that, but it’s fun, sometimes, to smile inside. I replied, “They come from everywhere.” I know it wasn’t a brilliant answer, but it’s true for me. I was on a train one night which was stuck on the tracks in the middle of a snowstorm. When it happened, I grabbed my pen and pad—always close at hand–and began scribbling conversations I heard. When the lights went out, I used my finger as a ruler to keep sentences from slanting too much, and was amazed at the change in those conversations. In the dark, it was as if each two-some was then having a private conversation. The dialogue became a non-fiction piece titled, “Train Talk”.
Another happening on a cruise ship gave birth to my children’s book, WERFUL AND THE CAPTAIN. While traveling in China, I walked a small part of the Great Wall. When my granddaughter read the article, “To Walk The Wall,” she exclaimed, “Nana, you walked the whole thing?” It was a great opportunity for a quick geography lesson about its length, (over 1200 miles) and how it came to be. The point is no matter where you are, watch, look, and listen because there’s a story out there waiting to be told.
A statement often asked in writing classes is “I don’t understand what the story “theme” means. When I was young, it was sometimes called the “slant”. I prefer to think of it as the statement a story implies, like anger is destructive or helping people is its own reward—a thread that weaves through the story and blends its parts together.
When your short story is ready to send out, to whom do you send it? First, decide what theme your story implies and the age group you want to reach. Teen magazine isn’t going to consider a story about a young boy’s new friend in kindergarten and Cricket won’t be interested in a teen’s terrible day in high school. That’s overly simplistic, but common sense is needed. Read a few issues of a magazine before submitting your story, and make sure your word count matches the magazine’s requirement. If you don’t consider those steps, your mailbox will fill with rejections.
One new writer, in a hurry to publish, moaned he had sent out five stories and received five rejections. Hmm. I asked, “Has anyone critiqued your stories?” and received the answer, “No. What’s a critique?” He thought each story was great. He had read them to his wife and a few friends, and they all thought so too. Sound familiar? My point is, serious writing is a job that entails learning one’s craft and it takes time. I offered to read one of his stories, but he decided to work on it some more before anyone saw it. I noted in last week’s blog, there is a vast difference between writing as a hobby and writing to sell.
When drafting your short story’s query letter, there are important points to cover. First is a small synopsis of the story. (no more than a paragraph) with your oh-so-important “hook”. How you write your paragraph will show an editor your ability to write an interesting and concise (no wasted words) story.
Whether an editor even wants your content should have been determined by you when reading the magazine and observing what themes have been accepted. Keep in mind holiday stories are usually accepted about nine months before the holiday like sending Christmas stories in March.
In a second, short paragraph, convince the editor you’re the right person to write for their children’s magazine. If you aren’t published, let them know other qualifications which enhance your ability to be knowledgeable—elementary school teacher, mother of six young children (God bless you), pediatric nurse, special needs teacher, etc.
Remember, your query is single-spaced and completed on one side of one sheet of paper.
Finally, be sure to have someone critique your short story query before sending it out; preferably your cohorts in a writing group like the Cape Cod Childrens Writers. If the query doesn’t pass inspection, your story will never make it to an editor’s desk. No writing group? Find one. Ask your librarian or bookstore owner for information.
Until next Wednesday, I leave you with a saying, which has adorned my refrigerator for years, “God touched your life today. Did you notice?” Be well. Linda

Apr

5

For the first time, Barnes & Nobles has selected a children’s book to head it’s “RECOMMENDS” list. The MG novel is entitled OKAY FOR NOW  by Gary D. Schmit.

Clarion printed 150,000 copies for the first printing. Schmidt will participate in a ten-city author tour to promote his book.

Okay for Now is a sequel to The Wednesday Wars, but it can be enjoyed by readers as a stand alone novel.

Doug moves into a small town where he has no friends. He lives with an abusive father and an older brother, who is a fine mix of good and bad. Doug becomes friendly with Lil, and her father offers him a job delivering groceries. By chance, Doug finds something in a library that changes his life.

JOAN

Apr

5

When I read my Izzy B pages at our last Cape Cod Children’s Writers critique group meeting, the question arose as to whether certain events were in the proper sequence.

 Now that I have completed my first draft of my chapter book, Izzy B’s Notebook, and the re-writing and tweaking process has begun, it seems a good idea to re-read the manuscript in one sitting and construct a timeline of the events. The story takes place from September to June,  Izzy B’s fourth grade school year. Plotting the events on a timeline will let me know if everything is occurring in the proper sequence.

 When the muse is present and the writing flowing, it’s delightful to get lost in the story, and easy to get mixed up at times as to what happened when—especially if there has been a length of time between writing sessions. A timeline can be a helpful tool.

 It occurs to me as I write this that perhaps it would be a good idea to keep an ongoing timeline as I write. Perhaps I will put that idea into practice on my next book.

Apr

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Linda Urban is another author who will be presenting a workshop at the Society of Children’s Book Writers and Illustrators- New England conference in Fitchburg MA, May 13-15. I had the pleasure of listening to her book, A Crooked Kind of Perfect, as I did errands in my car.

A Crooked Kind of Perfect is a middle grade novel packed with humor. Zoe Elias, the main character, is 11 years old. She desperately wants to learn how to play the piano and dreams of playing in Carnegie Hall. She is sure she is an undiscovered child prodigy who only needs a piano to get started on her path to fame.

Zoe asks her parents for a used piano and lessons. Her mother works long hours as a controller, so her stay-at-home father makes the family financial decisions.

Zoe’s father is afraid to leave the house. He panics when he has to drive somewhere and often gets lost. He manages to make it to the Mall, but becomes so overwhelmed by the crowd of people that he lets a salesperson talk him into buying a Perfectone D-60 organ. Zoe is very disappointed, but gamely takes the free lessons and practices diligently. Her teacher enters her into the Perform-O-Rama organ competition—a far cry from Carnegie Hall—but not as horrible as Zoe imagined it might be.

I loved the quirky characters Linda created in this story. Zoe’s mother and father, organ teacher, and friend from school were unique and memorable.

Actress Tai Alexandra Ricci did an excellent job reading this story. Her voice sounded young, but not annoyingly so, which has been the case in other middle grade and chapter books I’ve listened to.

Linda Urban is also the author of a picture book; Mouse was Mad, illustrated by Henry Cole. In this cute story, Mouse tries to find his own way to express his anger.

It’s not too late to start reading some of the books written by the conference participants. If you can’t get to them all, feel free to print out my reviews found on this website to refer to at the conference.

Believe!

Karen Centofanti

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